I am at this time very confused.
A person that read what I published of my translation here and said me the following:” I really liked the concept, the idea that the main character could feel the emotions behind places. That has me hooked from the start. But, regarding the flow of the piece, it felt kind of choppy. I think this might partially be an issue of translation. Some of the words didn't make sense in the context of the sentence. For example, in the first paragraph it says "enjoying these moments of solitude where no alien feeling could alter my calmness, except for those that still remain in the old facades." I've highlighted the words that make it difficult to understand. This does happen in other places, too. Again, this seems like an issue of translation. I don't think that your ideas are being conveyed as they should be in English.”
Well this got me thinking if it's such a good idea to have someone else translating my novel, no one knows the voice of my character better than me, well just my best friend and critique partner who is helping me with corrections in English and Spanish. Maybe it's time to think about doing it myself even if I make it slowly.
Translating it by myself will help me in the entire publishing process and I could make revisions without assistance and only depend on me. It could also help me improve and can start writing in English directly.
But I have to admit that it scares me, I'm not American and my grammar is bad, I know I can improve with study and practice.But it scares me because I don´t have critique partners that can say if I am going well or I need to improve. Many writers are afraid to criticize a novel that is a translation. I don´t know why, I want them to see it as if it were one written in English but these are the reasons they gave me.
On the other hand, a translator would translate it faster and my project would be available in English before, but may lose its essence...
I need your help since English is your native language. Do you think the girl that made these comments was right?
What would you do?
I know that every person is different and makes its decisions based on that but sometimes it is easier to decide on something important by hearing the views of others. Because if I venture in this it is going to be a tough job....