tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post6595567845737370581..comments2023-11-07T04:11:46.089-06:00Comments on Dreams about writing: Words 2...Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-49080016182008958622010-12-12T23:15:59.000-06:002010-12-12T23:15:59.000-06:00YAY! Congrats Carlos!!All of the usages looked gre...YAY! Congrats Carlos!!<br>All of the usages looked great. i would change the creep in sentene to: The sun crept in the room, marking a new day. (But that's me.)tracy_d74http://tracy_d74.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-15658340638310177952010-12-12T23:19:45.000-06:002010-12-12T23:19:45.000-06:00yes, it reads smoother like that!Thank you!!:)yes, it reads smoother like that!<br>Thank you!!:)anabelgonzalezdehernandohttp://dreamsaboutwriting.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-75577989968317932472010-12-13T00:22:17.000-06:002010-12-13T00:22:17.000-06:00All of them can be used in that way. I agree with ...All of them can be used in that way. I agree with the previous commenter, though, and think the "creep in" sentence seems a little stiff, very formal. I think I would go with tracy_d74's sentence. :-) <br>The only other change I would make is "I had so many unknowns to answer". It works, but I think I would say, "There were so many unknowns to consider". You could also use "factor": "There were so many unknown factors to consider." I think that sentence seems a little less... awkward. :-) That's when it gets tricky, knowing what just SOUNDS right, you know?finalarrowhailhttp://finalarrowhail.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-71696747157882009052010-12-13T12:36:16.000-06:002010-12-13T12:36:16.000-06:00I like them all, though #1 has a slightly differen...I like them all, though #1 has a slightly different connotation, in my mind. I think I usually assume that someone 'toys' with something they want to do, like an action they hope to take. But that doesn't mean it can't be used as you're using it. When I read the sentence, I thought *contemplated* might be a stronger word, but that's only my take on it :)robinellenhttp://robinellen.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-9848610687649986482010-12-13T13:11:41.000-06:002010-12-13T13:11:41.000-06:00Yes knowing what sound right is the msot difficult...Yes knowing what sound right is the msot difficult for me.<br>Thank you very much for your help!anabelgonzalezdehernandohttp://dreamsaboutwriting.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-63882672601136310302010-12-13T13:12:52.000-06:002010-12-13T13:12:52.000-06:00contemplated sounds great too. Mmm I am going to t...contemplated sounds great too. Mmm I am going to try it in the complete paragraph.<br>Thank you!anabelgonzalezdehernandohttp://dreamsaboutwriting.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-46380625108159280662010-12-13T17:59:55.000-06:002010-12-13T17:59:55.000-06:00Toyed: Yes. "toyed with my dream" is a l...Toyed: Yes. "toyed with my dream" is a little different from what we usually hear (it would usually be something like, "she toyed with her fork" or "you're just toying with me"), but I think you can toy with a dream, and I like the originality!<br>Creep in: Yes, although I would say "creep into the room" rather than "creep in the room"<br>Endure: Yes, correct. Actually, the fact that the noise was terribly annoying is better to show rather than tell. Or even skip it: "The noise in my head began again. All I could do was endure it." <br>Cease: Yes. It's rather formal, though.<br>Unknown: Yes; you probably don't even need the phrase "to answer." <br>Flit: Yes.<br>Yay Carlos!writerjennhttp://writerjenn.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-41499614508263733622010-12-13T20:49:12.000-06:002010-12-13T20:49:12.000-06:00Looks very good. I'm so impressed you are lea...Looks very good. I'm so impressed you are learning all this on your own with a dictionary! You're amazing. And congrats on Carlos!musingaloudhttp://musingaloud.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-44622072551035609812010-12-13T21:37:33.000-06:002010-12-13T21:37:33.000-06:00YEI!! and I got sparkles too!:)YEI!! and I got sparkles too!:)anabelgonzalezdehernandohttp://dreamsaboutwriting.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-15249792781278604262010-12-13T21:40:07.000-06:002010-12-13T21:40:07.000-06:00I like the changes you are suggesting in the endur...I like the changes you are suggesting in the endure phrase! Thank you!!:)anabelgonzalezdehernandohttp://dreamsaboutwriting.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1976862075418000481.post-92134958827311506172010-12-13T21:42:33.000-06:002010-12-13T21:42:33.000-06:00Ok thank you very much! (now I'm blushing)I am...Ok thank you very much! (now I'm blushing)<br>I am learning it with 4 dictionaries. My husband bought me a license for a program called babylon that you can add a lot of dictionaries so when I put a word it appears the meanings of many dictionaries. It also makes translations, but not very good ones.:)anabelgonzalezdehernandohttp://dreamsaboutwriting.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.com